bonded

You do what

I tell you,

exactly how I

want it, not

because I need

You

But because you need

Me.

-Jas©

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22 responses to “bonded

  1. Some thoughts that you are entirely free to disregard:
    1. you’re telling here, when you can show. An animal metaphor, an infant. A houseplant. Evocation bypasses the rational and goes straight into the emotional realm.
    2. Structurally, the pacing is much more effective. Terse, easier on the eye which adds weight to the emotions on display here.
    Good, powerful stuff, Jas.

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