arguments

you tell me to

stop

fucking

around,

I tell you its

all

your

fault.

we both end up naked

and panting on the couch.

-Jas©

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11 responses to “arguments

  1. Lovely juxtaposition and the short format really works for you. The only suggestion I would have made would have been to put the ‘stop fucking around’ line into three

    you tell me to

    stop
    fucking
    around

    I tell you its

    all
    your
    fault.

    Because you’re also mirroring and foreshadowing, that kind of hard, hot post argument sex as well, but that’s merely an aesthetic suggestion, which you are always free to ignore.

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